revise dialogue in hedamsel-in-distress [grammar/etc]

lib/screenplay-xml/tt2-txt/He-Damsel-in-Distress-and-a-Distressing-Damsel.screenplay-text.txt.tt2

@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@ He-Damsel-in-Distress and a Distressing Damsel
 [ Television News Station ]
 
 News Anchor: This night, Shlomi Fish’s bedroom in his apartment in
-<a href="https://www.shlomifish.org/philosophy/culture/multiverse-cosmology/#ramatavivgimel">Ramat Aviv Gimel, Tel Aviv</a> was detonated taking Fish’s life. Tiffany Alvord, who is a singer, musician, song-writer, actress, and creator, and whom Fish has featured in some of his recent fan-fiction works, and admitted to have been infatuated with, has claimed responsibility for that bombing.
+<a href="https://www.shlomifish.org/philosophy/culture/multiverse-cosmology/#ramatavivgimel">Ramat Aviv Gimel, Tel Aviv</a> was detonated, taking Fish’s life. Tiffany Alvord, who is a singer, musician, song-writer, actress, and creator, and whom Fish has featured in some of his recent fan-fiction works, and admitted to have been infatuated with, has claimed responsibility for that bombing.
 
 +++: Ms. Alvord had previously published a blog post criticising the fact that Fish has admitted to liking or even loving many entities <a href="https://www.shlomifish.org/meta/FAQ/">on his Frequently-Asked-Questions List (“FAQ”)</a>. Moreover, she recorded and uploaded a video:
 
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@ tax-deductible donations, it by no means encourages fame mongering.
 Shlomi Fish: while I admit that one can overdo fame mongering, I think becoming
 famous is better than becoming rich. If you are famous (and you are not a
 vampire who is living in a terrestrial hell), you'll likely find several, often
-complementary ways to become richer. Like
+complementary and mutually-inclusive, ways to become richer. Like
 <a href="https://www.shlomifish.org/humour/fortunes/show.cgi?id=greatest-threat-to-authors">Tim O'Reilly noted</a>: <q>The greatest threat to authors and creative artists is not piracy — it’s obscurity.</q>.
 
 Shlomi Fish: or as <a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ecclesiastes">Ecclesiastes</a> had written that "reputation is better than fine oil", around 300 B. C..
@@ -155,12 +155,12 @@ Shlomi Fish: A first-world problem? Heh.
 
 Shlomi Fish: note that I am also open to donating time (and enthusiasm).
 However, in each class of tasks, there are many implementation technologies
-which I don't know. e.g: I know English and Hebrew (to extents), but not
-Spanish, German, or Japanese. I also do not know Rust, Haskell,
-or x86-64 Assembly well.
+which I don't know. For example: I know English and Hebrew (to substantial
+extents), but not Spanish, German, or Japanese. I also do not know Rust,
+Haskell, or x86-64 Assembly well.
 
 Shlomi Fish: however, other people on Freenode and I, can try pointing you at
-network resources where there may be experienced specialists.
+network resources where one can hopefully find more-experienced specialists.
 
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