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@@ -32,12 +32,12 @@ price was often prohibitive.
 
 <p>
 One fact that made Gold costly was its use by pricey jewellery which indicated
-that the woman who wore them was both rich, and physically strong. However,
+that the women who wore them were both rich, and physically strong. However,
 even the strongest women reported that they were inconvenienced by wearing the
 heavier jewels. Moreover, their cost was no longer prohibitive enough to
 indicate wealth, yet high enough to indicate being frivolous. Moreover, there
 was competition from cheap, light, accessories, made from cheaper materials,
-which also usually looked better.
+which also usually looked better and had more variance.
 </p>
 
 <p>
@@ -51,7 +51,13 @@ this change.
 <p>
 As a result, the gold bars that were kept in the vaults of the New York City
 bank as a rudimentary gesture of indicating national wealth, announced that
-they will assume different forms and disappear.
+they will assume different forms and disappear. They did, and I think the vault
+rooms were re-purposed.
+</p>
+
+<p>
+So gold became cheaper, and more accessible for science and engineering (and other
+uses).
 </p>
 
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